Eye contact
Posture
Tone
Background preparation
How did you feel?
Wednesday, February 10, 2010
Quotes
1. “Freedom’s just another word for nothing left to lose,” Janice said.
2. Lisa said she planned to attend the rally.
3. Jones said he will be there Wednesday.
4. He asked “Are all your flights full?”
5. Jones said he made a “freshman mistake": throwing the ball into a crowd of defenders.
6. Did Bennett say, "It will be a long season"?
7. Did Bennett say, “Will it be a long season?”
8. “Wulff's statement that he would 'beat the Huskies in Seattle' has outraged our fans,” Sarkisian said.
9. “We think it’s a great situation for our band,” Kurt said. “We’re ecstatic."
“Can you get us backstage passes?” Kurt asked Dave, who was standing next to him.
10. “How can we not succeed?” he asked.
2. Lisa said she planned to attend the rally.
3. Jones said he will be there Wednesday.
4. He asked “Are all your flights full?”
5. Jones said he made a “freshman mistake": throwing the ball into a crowd of defenders.
6. Did Bennett say, "It will be a long season"?
7. Did Bennett say, “Will it be a long season?”
8. “Wulff's statement that he would 'beat the Huskies in Seattle' has outraged our fans,” Sarkisian said.
9. “We think it’s a great situation for our band,” Kurt said. “We’re ecstatic."
“Can you get us backstage passes?” Kurt asked Dave, who was standing next to him.
10. “How can we not succeed?” he asked.
Monday, February 8, 2010
Edit your peers
Edit your peers
1. He died from a massive heart attack on Feb. 1.
2. These lights would be especially important on one-way streets, he said.
3. The play will be Feb. 4 to 7, 2010.
4. For more information, contact John E. Williamson, committee co-chair.
5. Dennis Alexander, adopted composer for the Pedagogy Piano Lab School, will be lecturing on Saturday.
6. En'Wezoh hopes to recruit people who best complement and execute the intended vision.
7. The Interfraternity Council President Benjamin Highsmith, will attend. “GLA is a beneficial experience for all who attend," Highsmith said. "It is time dedicated to fostering relationships between Greek chapters, while identifying commonalities and determining a direction for our community.”
8. The drug-related film will be featured in a special showcase that will air as the final show.
9. “There are still new things to say with art music," said Kyle Winter, the club's president. "It’s hard to stop and listen, but when you do, it can be an extremely pleasant surprise.”
1. He died from a massive heart attack on Feb. 1.
2. These lights would be especially important on one-way streets, he said.
3. The play will be Feb. 4 to 7, 2010.
4. For more information, contact John E. Williamson, committee co-chair.
5. Dennis Alexander, adopted composer for the Pedagogy Piano Lab School, will be lecturing on Saturday.
6. En'Wezoh hopes to recruit people who best complement and execute the intended vision.
7. The Interfraternity Council President Benjamin Highsmith, will attend. “GLA is a beneficial experience for all who attend," Highsmith said. "It is time dedicated to fostering relationships between Greek chapters, while identifying commonalities and determining a direction for our community.”
8. The drug-related film will be featured in a special showcase that will air as the final show.
9. “There are still new things to say with art music," said Kyle Winter, the club's president. "It’s hard to stop and listen, but when you do, it can be an extremely pleasant surprise.”
Saturday, February 6, 2010
Jess Walter Speech
Going into an industry that is dying can be scary to some, but if writing is your passion then the market will be there and the pay will come, said Jess Walter Thursday evening in CADD Room 21.
“It never occurred to me that a newspaper could die” read Walter from his newest novel The Financial Lives of the Poets.
“It felt like I was dying,” he read.
Jess Walter, a former journalist and finalist for the 2006 National Book Award, spoke to about 75 WSU creative writing and journalism students and staff members about pursuing a career in the dying writing industry.
Walter told students that phases come and go, so students should keep their head up during this low economy and continue to pursue what they desire. Walter is the author of five novels and one non-fiction book.
“As an English major, that is the best thing you can hear,” said Jillian Clark, a junior creative writing student at WSU.
“It is reassuring to hear, when everyone else tells you you’re crazy for wanting to pursue this career.”
“It never occurred to me that a newspaper could die” read Walter from his newest novel The Financial Lives of the Poets.
“It felt like I was dying,” he read.
Jess Walter, a former journalist and finalist for the 2006 National Book Award, spoke to about 75 WSU creative writing and journalism students and staff members about pursuing a career in the dying writing industry.
Walter told students that phases come and go, so students should keep their head up during this low economy and continue to pursue what they desire. Walter is the author of five novels and one non-fiction book.
“As an English major, that is the best thing you can hear,” said Jillian Clark, a junior creative writing student at WSU.
“It is reassuring to hear, when everyone else tells you you’re crazy for wanting to pursue this career.”
Monday, February 1, 2010
Chopped story-- Tragedy on Ice
This excerpted story, part of a package of stories that won the 2003 Pulitzer Prize for breaking news, has been chopped, scrambled, altered, doctored and otherwise messed up by me.
In the process, I broke it.
Please put it back together in the order you would choose. Then discuss with your table the questions that you would take back to your reporters. What’s missing? Are there individual sentences that you would rewrite? Can you make the best even better?
Tragedy on ice
By O'Ryan Johnson and Chris Markuns
Staff Writers
December 15, 2002
When: Yesterday or Tuesday
Paragraphs
Four boys age 7 to 11 drowned when a group of seven boys plunged through thin ice.
Dead are William Rodriguez, 11, of 292 Howard St.; Christopher Casado, 7, of 18 Jasper Court; Mackendy Constant, 8, of 7 Clinton St.; and Victor Baez, 9, 46 Bernard Ave.
Police said the four dead boys were trapped under the ice at least 10 minutes.
The ice was one to two inches thick where they ventured off the river bank. Four inches is considered the minimum to support more than one person, and river ice may not be safe even at that thickness because of currents and other factors.
As seven boys finished their snack run from the Lawrence Boys & Girls Club to Hanson's Market yesterday afternoon, a sudden urge to slide around prompted 11-year-old William Rodriguez to dash for the serene expanse of river ice.
It was a playful impulse that ended with his plunge through the ice, setting off an ill-fated rescue attempt that deteriorated into a mass of desperate children clinging to each other in 35-degree water.
"Willie said he wanted to go down to the river, to slide on the Ice," Ivan said. “We tried to stop him.”
Surviving the incident were Francis Spraus, 9, 14 School St.; Christopher's brother Ivan Casado, 9, 18 Jasper Court; Jaycob Morales, 10, 4 Winslow Place.
Ivan and Francis were released from the hospital last night, and recalled the story from its quiet start.
The catastrophe left four boys dead, their families crushed and rescue workers shaken following an afternoon of fighting a river of broken ice, the steep mud-covered bank and driving rain.
Lawrence and Andover firefighters equipped with ice rescue suits arrived and after a search of the area where the boys went in, found the four remaining boys under the ice, 25 feet from shore in 15-20 feet of water.
Because of the steep embankment, rescuers were forced to use ladders to bring the children up off the river to the waiting ambulances.
Members of the state police, Lawrence Police and Merrimack Valley dive teams entered the 38-degree water and conducted an area search to be sure no one was left behind.
It was the worst local Merrimack River tragedy in nearly a century.
Quotes
"I threw the rope out once and it landed too far away, so I threw it out again, and again it was too far for them to reach," said Jacques Fournier, a retired maintenance worker.
"He was in the middle of the river," Francis said, Ivan finishing the sentence: "Then the ice broke and he fell down in the water."
"Then we all fell in," said Francis. "I thought I was going to drown."
"My legs started to get stiff, and I had a freezing headache," Francis said. "I was hanging on to Christopher, but he started to slip under. I tried holding on to his hand, but it was like he let go.
In the process, I broke it.
Please put it back together in the order you would choose. Then discuss with your table the questions that you would take back to your reporters. What’s missing? Are there individual sentences that you would rewrite? Can you make the best even better?
Tragedy on ice
By O'Ryan Johnson and Chris Markuns
Staff Writers
December 15, 2002
When: Yesterday or Tuesday
Paragraphs
Four boys age 7 to 11 drowned when a group of seven boys plunged through thin ice.
Dead are William Rodriguez, 11, of 292 Howard St.; Christopher Casado, 7, of 18 Jasper Court; Mackendy Constant, 8, of 7 Clinton St.; and Victor Baez, 9, 46 Bernard Ave.
Police said the four dead boys were trapped under the ice at least 10 minutes.
The ice was one to two inches thick where they ventured off the river bank. Four inches is considered the minimum to support more than one person, and river ice may not be safe even at that thickness because of currents and other factors.
As seven boys finished their snack run from the Lawrence Boys & Girls Club to Hanson's Market yesterday afternoon, a sudden urge to slide around prompted 11-year-old William Rodriguez to dash for the serene expanse of river ice.
It was a playful impulse that ended with his plunge through the ice, setting off an ill-fated rescue attempt that deteriorated into a mass of desperate children clinging to each other in 35-degree water.
"Willie said he wanted to go down to the river, to slide on the Ice," Ivan said. “We tried to stop him.”
Surviving the incident were Francis Spraus, 9, 14 School St.; Christopher's brother Ivan Casado, 9, 18 Jasper Court; Jaycob Morales, 10, 4 Winslow Place.
Ivan and Francis were released from the hospital last night, and recalled the story from its quiet start.
The catastrophe left four boys dead, their families crushed and rescue workers shaken following an afternoon of fighting a river of broken ice, the steep mud-covered bank and driving rain.
Lawrence and Andover firefighters equipped with ice rescue suits arrived and after a search of the area where the boys went in, found the four remaining boys under the ice, 25 feet from shore in 15-20 feet of water.
Because of the steep embankment, rescuers were forced to use ladders to bring the children up off the river to the waiting ambulances.
Members of the state police, Lawrence Police and Merrimack Valley dive teams entered the 38-degree water and conducted an area search to be sure no one was left behind.
It was the worst local Merrimack River tragedy in nearly a century.
Quotes
"I threw the rope out once and it landed too far away, so I threw it out again, and again it was too far for them to reach," said Jacques Fournier, a retired maintenance worker.
"He was in the middle of the river," Francis said, Ivan finishing the sentence: "Then the ice broke and he fell down in the water."
"Then we all fell in," said Francis. "I thought I was going to drown."
"My legs started to get stiff, and I had a freezing headache," Francis said. "I was hanging on to Christopher, but he started to slip under. I tried holding on to his hand, but it was like he let go.
Commas. Ugh.
Correct the following sentences. If the sentence is already correct, write “correct.”
1. We looked through the church door, but we did not see anyone.
2. We could wait to see if anyone else came, or we could go back home. Correct
3. This will end up having an effect on consumers, she said.
4. Britney paid $80 for her editing text, but she received only $4 at the resale desk.
5. According to Washington state law, bars will become smoke free on Feb. 15.
6. I saw Karen and we had coffee.
7. The home was bright and cheery; however it made me uncomfortable.
8. It was raining so we stayed home.
9. Later he phoned again.
Underline the subject and verb of the following sentences:
Another impact that increases the purchasing of alcohol is the premises that sell alcohol on and off the WSU campus.
The best advice the CACD can give is, do not post things that you would not want people to see.
1. We looked through the church door, but we did not see anyone.
2. We could wait to see if anyone else came, or we could go back home. Correct
3. This will end up having an effect on consumers, she said.
4. Britney paid $80 for her editing text, but she received only $4 at the resale desk.
5. According to Washington state law, bars will become smoke free on Feb. 15.
6. I saw Karen and we had coffee.
7. The home was bright and cheery; however it made me uncomfortable.
8. It was raining so we stayed home.
9. Later he phoned again.
Underline the subject and verb of the following sentences:
Another impact that increases the purchasing of alcohol is the premises that sell alcohol on and off the WSU campus.
The best advice the CACD can give is, do not post things that you would not want people to see.
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